The Savior's Champion

By: Jenna Moreci

Narrated by: Nick Denton

Length: 20 hrs and 36 mins

Publisher's Summary

Tobias Kaya doesn't care about The Savior. He doesn't care that She's the ruler of the realm or that She purified the land, and he certainly doesn't care that She's of age to be married. But when competing for Her hand proves to be his last chance to save his family, he's forced to make The Savior his priority.

Now Tobias is thrown into the Sovereign's Tournament with nineteen other men, and each of them is fighting - and killing - for the chance to rule at The Savior's side. Instantly, his world is plagued with violence, treachery, and manipulation, revealing the hidden ugliness of his proud realm. And when his circumstances seem especially dire, he stumbles into an unexpected romance, one that opens him up to unimaginable dangers and darkness.

Trigger warnings: this book contains graphic violence, foul language, and sexual situations.

©2017 Jenna Moreci (P)2019 Jenna Moreci

Story Didn't Have To Be This Long

This is one of those stories in which I found myself sighing in exasperation, because the lead female character has an obvious secret--and if she had revealed it earlier on in the book, a lot of people would not have suffered and/or died. She doesn't reveal the secret until the very end, and her reasoning for being secretive is pretty weak, when compared to the loses that result from the secret.

The reader can figure out her secret pretty early in the book, which makes the lead male character look a little dim witted, since he somehow keeps missing all the clues.

I think I'd have a more positive impression, had the book been shorter. It was one thing to be annoyed by the lengthy reveal, but it was definitely exacerbated by the multiple teaser scenes. She'd announce that she has a secret, he'd, say, "what is it?" But instead of revealing it, she'd waver about how she was worried about his reaction... then they'd get distracted, and I'd yell, "AW, COME ON! NOT AGAIN! JUST TELL HIM YOUR DAMN SECRET!"

The story isn't bad, I just felt that it dragged on further than it needed to.

9 of 9 people found this review helpful

Oh boy

Genuinely shocked at the positive reviews for this work. I'm not one to write reviews normally, but if someone could find this which is in contention with the outrageous four stars, and this saves them some money, then it was worth writing. I feel bad for the voice actor, who wasn't quite as awful, although the random accent changes were extremely confusing.

First, its a romance novel. Don't allow the advertising and author to convince you otherwise. That doesn't automatically make it a bad book, don't get me wrong. Not all romance novels are awful. This just happens to be one that is not only a bad romance book, it is one marketed as an adventure fantasy. The political intrigue and power dynamics are as shallow as a high school teen flick. Nothing makes sense and everyone is dumb. The cliches are murderous. From ceaseless and casual phrases, such as "in another time, you and I could have been friends," to entire characters that start to meld together into bizarre caricatures. The main characters are depicted in such a strangely "aren't they so perfect" way they become completely unlikable. Add in hefty exposition, poor and weak world-building, confusing contradictions, absent descriptions that result in characters seemingly acting as floating heads arguing on a white stage, and bizarre dialogue that will make you cry "who even talks like this??"

There is so much wrong with this book, it's hard to even summarize.

The entire conceit begs so many unanswered questions. How could our Mary Sue Savior, who banished all the bad in the world just by virtue of being born, have a competition to the death for her hand in marriage? The book will hand-wave this with "isn't tradition so bad and sad? We should challenge tradition!" This is, of course, without an examination into how traditions are formed or sustained. It is what it is and isn't it bad? Our main character, Tobias, enters the competition because of his sister, who is positioned as a burden and not a person, despite being vehemently opposed to it and after literally a single night of thinking about it. We're never told why he is so exceptional as to question this tradition and think it is stupid, other than that the author herself holds that point of view.

In all the men in all the areas who tried out for the competition, wouldn't you know that Tobias' best friend and neighbor, who convinced him to join in a single night, also makes it in! What are the chances? It makes the world seem incredibly small, despite another Champion claiming to be from another kingdom ruled by another Queen, and a scene near the end where a bunch of foreign rulers show up for apparently no reason other than to bet and give Tobias a reason to talk smack. These sort of convenient set ups are continuous, making little sense and receiving little explanation. The Evil Dudes are evil for no reason, even when it would be in their self-interests to be "good." (The black and white morality of this book is also a huge point of contention for me.)

Even after reading, I have so many questions. Not "ohhh whats going to happen next" questions. No. Questions like: Why all the "cock," Moreci? Why did the main character have a scene touching himself? Why do they speak like teenagers, except the near constant and maddening "apologies?" Why do the characters use the word "God" in a world with a walking Goddess, is this in line with their religions, what are their religions?? Why?

Basically, this reads as a first draft. It is a first draft that needs hard editing, from the world to the writing. There was a concept here that might have worked, given the time and effort and editing required, and the removal of the Mary Sue Savior who cures the world of all Bad Things. Adult concepts are clumsily handled in the style of a middle grade fiction, with characters straight out of a sexist nightmare. There are just so many times a good editor would have gone, "yo, what, dude?"

Such as when a character explains its okay his wife died in childbirth, as she was destined to be with him.

Or when the love interest comforts the main character that, even though his sister's life must be the worst ever because she can't walk, she has him and he is "good."

Or how the quasi-Roman crowd expose their chests to flash the main character in a way that reads like a bad concert fic.

Or how the only other women allowed to exist are either mentally disabled, related to the main character, lesbian, or Evil. Other than the perfect love interest, of course. Which serves to make her exist in a vacuum where she is free of sexual competition, which is bizarre. We are gifted entire conversations between male characters which revolve around how superior love interest is to the Evil female character, who only has "shallow beauty."

That's before we even touch on the sexualized "more girl than woman" who is only added at the end to discuss how she wants to sleep with the Champions. This child is also Evil and begs her much older husband to purchase one (with the biggest cock) for the night for him to watch uh yeah, something he apparently enjoys. Again, what?

Oh, and Tobias' first kiss was with a much older girl who sexually assaulted him??

Clearly Moreci has a big issue with women.

She also positions sexual promiscuity as going hand in hand with being morally evil, and being sexually chaste with morally good. She reinforces this over and over. It's so outdated and strange, I didn't even catch it at first. But there it was, all along. This character is good because she has restraint and won't sleep with Tobias, this character is bad because she wants to sleep with Tobias. Ironically, this traditional message is inherent in the text despite Moreci constantly going "isn't tradition bad??" The cognitive dissonance is so prevalent. It's also prevalent when Tobias' superiority complex rears its head and he laments on "how anyone could love this character they've had one conversation with." All the while, he's willing to die for someone he's had a handful of (often antagonistic) exchanges with. All the conflict between the love interests, which spans pages and pages of fighting and hurt feelings, is entirely because of a failure to communicate.

Wow this review is long. I could go on. I have gone on, already, but this is just touching the surface of the issues within the book. It would take a review exponentially longer than this one to properly go through how awful it is. In sum, what, dude?

13 of 15 people found this review helpful

A Struggle..... For the listener

So........ I wanted to like this book, I really did. The author is an amazing youtuber with great advice, but this book didn't live up. It has a great concept, great ideas, but it was very poorly executed. Though the Nerrator was doing great, the rest of the story as well as the concepts explored in this book fell flat.

The characters, though they held some interesting qualities(and only very little at that), I found myself not caring about them, including the protagonist. I found myself wanting scenes to be over so that maybe, just maybe, the next one would be good. I've owned this book for some time and struggled with every step along the reading process. Not due to any complexity, but due to the lack of drive, the boring "action" scenes, and the dragging plot. She seemed to choose to tell rather than to show.

The story has a soft magic system, which is perfectly fine, however it produces several ex machina throughout the book, resolving any and all tension without any payoff.

As good as the authors writing advice is, this book makes me question the authenticity of her tips and advice, for she didn't seem to follow any of her own tricks.

7 of 8 people found this review helpful

"The Bachelorette" for newer readers

*Spoiler Free*

At first, the worst thing I could say about this book is that it was adequate....until I got to the half way point. I love romance books, and I love stories that get "dark", but this felt like it was written by someone who has only a shallow understanding of what makes each of those ideas great.

Let's start with the main character, Tobias. In the beginning, he's fairly proactive, and there's a lot to like about him. He's hard working, has a good relationship with family, etc. He joins the death game style tournament willingly, and seems poised to lead us on a harrowing journey to survive. Unfortunately, his goal is already met as soon as he enters the tournament. Whether he lives or dies doesn't matter anymore outside of him being the audience surrogate, so the stakes are non-existent outside of surviving for his own sake.

That wouldn't be a problem, except that the book never frames his survival as result of his choices. The challenges are essentially a stick that get used over and over to prod him into action, and it robs him of his agency. Several times it's mentioned how the competitors have "had their humanity robbed of them", and its true in all the worst ways. What started as a promising protagonist has slowly been beaten into a handbag whose only purpose is to be carried all the way to the finals. It's not fun, entertaining, or even suspenseful, since we know he'll survive everything anyways.

It's not just Tobias either. A majority of the supporting cast are underdeveloped, reduced down to their archetypes. "Nice hunter guy", "Horny nobleman", "Honorable but stupid dude". They're all fairly one note for the majority of the story, except later on when the author starts telegraphing that its their turn to die soon in an attempt to get you more attached before the "shocking reveal". Anyone we're not meant to get attached to gets a limited vocabulary that revolves around "cock", "cunt", and "fuck", and exist as puppets to show that Tobias is clearly the contestant to root for by comparison.

The antagonists are particularly disappointing. Over the book, there are four primary forces that try to get in Tobias's way, or outright kill them. Except, they don't nearly as often as you think they would in a death match. While there's a later explanation about why there aren't any assassination attempts on Tobias between matches, you'd think there would be a lot more...direct effort from people who have killed other competitors without a thought earlier on.

Perhaps its because the villains are just dumb muscle. None of them have a personality beyond "I am big, tough, and clearly better than you." Imagine having three copies of "The Mountain" from "Game of Thrones", and they all say more or less the same three sentences. As intimidating as the man's supposed to be, it gets boring, repetitive, and kills any chance at satisfaction since he beats them all the same way.

But even with all of that, the book was still passable if bland. The real trouble starts in the second half, once all of the competitors finally leave the tunnel.

Throughout the book, there's a running sub-plot about Tobias falling in love with a secretive and tight-lipped woman. They're early interactions are cute, and it was nice to see them slowly getting to know each other. But once they're out of the cave, the slow and nicely paced romance gets thrown out the window for desperate proclamations of love, despite having known each other for only a few weeks, and still feeling each other out as people. Tobias's emotional IQ drops several points in order to stir up lazy drama between him and his partner. It frames him as an emotionally abusive/manipulative asshole that isn't worth our investment.

One scene is particularly hair screechingly frustrating because Tobias's partner is begging him to let her share his secret. But Tobias is so far up his ass that he refuses to hear her out. Later, when the secret is revealed, he starts biting her head off about how "she lied", about how she was "using him", despite the fact that he was the one shutting her up and refusing to listen. There are at least two or three more scenes like this, and it is so frustrating to see such lazy and artificial conflict ruin what could have been a serviceable relationship.

Speaking of twists and secrets (I won't give spoilers), but the book burns all of its good ones within the first act. There are ~3 deaths to start, and the book makes it very clear that everyone WILL die eventually, so why bother getting emotionally attached to any of them? One character's "twist secret" can be figured out with her introduction, and makes dragging out the reveal incredibly frustrating and unsatisfying. While there is a massive backstory to explore, this book hasn't given me any reason to care about it.

Older teens and new adults who haven't explored books like this may get to enjoy this title, and more power to them. For someone who actively reads books in the "dark", "fantasy", & "romance" genres, however, all of the above represent tired, overused tropes that serve as crutches for writers that aren't willing/able to come up with better solutions.

Overall, this book isn't worth your time. It's a chore to get through and you'd be better served spending your money/credits on another title. Personally, I will not be buying any of the author's other titles in the future because, as this book so poignantly says, "Fuck the Savior".

5 of 6 people found this review helpful

Premise was nice but was pretty basic.

The overall idea was pretty solid, but the execution could have been so much better.

I'll give credit where credit is due. The author worked her butt off for this book, as evident with her YouTube channel. I applaud her for this. Even the narrator was pretty decent, and he did his best.

But the plot twist was evident the entire time. Maybe that was the author's intention, maybe not. The other plot twists didn't exactly appear evident, but they weren't hinted enough either. One was mentioned earlier on in the book, but another one, not so much. The information wasn't given in a consistent manner.

The main character did not seem to evolve, at least to me. He remained relatively the same, other than falling in love. He had a lot of things spelled out for him when it could have been used as a great plot point for suspense.

** Mild spoiler ahead**

The biggest example was one of the best scenes of the book, in my opinion. Before the competition moved to the palace, Leila told Tobias to not look at the statues. So much suspense and terror could have been implemented in the garden when the statues came to life, trying to kill everyone. It would have been such an amazing scene if he didn't know something was wrong with looking at the statues and telling everyone beforehand.

I get it, it was written this way to expose Tobias's kind nature as a reflection from earlier when he saved Flynn, but in my opinion, he shouldn't have been given this ONE thing like he had been given everything else.

I feel this book could have been so much better. Maybe the second book will answer many of the questions that I still have.

It reads like a YA novel, although it's classified, at least by the author, as an adult dark fantasy/romance. So if you haven't really read a ton of adult novels, but you want to read adult words like "cock" a lot, then this book is for you.

Overall, it was an alright story. I've seen a lot of people enjoy this book, and I've also seen others who were not as charmed. I'm of the latter group.

2 of 2 people found this review helpful

The protagonist is a whiney cock.

I really wanted to like this book. I watch the author’s youtube videoes and really like her humor and brutal straightforwardness. But that said, it was a disappointment.

Why? Let’s start with the hypocrisy. Representation. Lot of people represented, though I swear skin color changed from time to time. The only semi-kind and decent male (though obviously a bully) was gay. The rest, besides the protagonist, were all hateful sums of bitch.

All the women were portrayed as strong but were all basically helpless and victims of those nasty men. They were all fiesty, cunning, smart, powerful, but somehow at the mercy of the mean ruler.

Then came the protagonist. Well, actually, he started in the beginning. It was as if the author tried to reinvent men for this guy. He starts out having sacrificed all of his dreams to help the family. Which is normal for a decent guy that loves family. But masculinity comes with a certain amount backbone, driven to do the right thing, even when it dangerous or stupid. I swear, if this guy isn’t in a rage, he was whining. The goddess (for her power and kindness) bent over backward for him, and all he did was whine at her for not revealing all of her secrets to him. He didn’t have any talent or skill of his own, accept artist ability, which the goddess liked. His entire worth to her and the kingdom was really her power unless him drawing pictures of her will save the country. The author talks about the “separation” and how uneven social status sucks. She is a goddess, and he works in the field.

He turned on her and emotionally attacked her, twice. It wasn't that he physically abused her, but as one that knows abuse, he emotionally abused her and will probably continue if there are other books. I wanted to slap the shit out of him. And there is no promise that he won’t do it again.

1 of 1 people found this review helpful

I’m on the fence...

I liked the overall idea of the story. The plot drew me immediately! I thought it would be hunger games with a added kick to it. Well and here’s my dilemma, it did have some hunger game similarities but for R rated audience. They profanity throughout the whole book is OMG!!! Sometimes it’s every other sentence!! There’s mentioning of rape several times and the C word is a constant throughout. There’s even a man on man pleasure scene as well ( just FYI). Then it left us at the end just knowing there’s perhaps a sequel. I don’t know if I can handle another book. I want to know what happens but I hope the author really tames down the profanity. Make the next book young adult cause this one I certainly wouldn’t consider it that! Also very demeaning to women in the book.

1 of 1 people found this review helpful

DNFed because of story

The narrator was great, but that really doesn't make up for a predictable story with a poor setting and bad characters. I had a lot of hope for this book, but between the dialogue and Gary Due characters, I'm just disappointed.

1 of 1 people found this review helpful

Story isn't worth it

The reading of the book was great. The narrator was able to deliver it well, but the story wasn't good. It was too cliche, at some point I got tired of hearing the words, something and apologies...The plot was also predictable... early on I was able to predict the main twist of the story.

1 of 1 people found this review helpful

Awful Narration

I was very excited to listen to this audiobook since I actually follow the author on social media, but as soon as pressed play I immediately got a headache from just listening to the narrator. Soon after I decided to just exchange it for another book that sparked my interest. I may or may not give this book a second chance later on since I know that I didn't give it a fair shot, but for now I think I'll just wait until I get myself a physical copy of the book.

1 of 1 people found this review helpful

That was fabulous

Buckle your seatbelt, it's all go.
Violence, curse words and romance in galore. I hate romance as a general rule, but this has to be the exception. I routed for this, and I loved both participants in this relationahip, which is a first for me.
Loves me some strong violence and foul language, and this book has it in abundance, and in appropriate places. Nothing seemed unnecessary in my opinion.
All in all, it's a very exciting read/listen. Nicely narrated with a good range of voices and emotion.
Highly recommend.

2 of 2 people found this review helpful

Fantastic!!!

5 stars in every category! The story itself is great and the telling by nick Denton was an absolute blast! Nick does a great job at making you believe there are many different characters before you and keeps the story telling interesting and never boring! Fantastic! Not once was I bored by the writing or by the audio! Highly recommend for people who love adult fantasy!

2 of 2 people found this review helpful

I love sufferation

I'm glad I picked up this book. It's filled with so much angst and dread, at every turn the hardships pile on, even when you think "oh! it can’t POSSIBLY get any worse for them", it just DOES. In a completely rational way it just continuously throws you for a loop, it gives you clues that become blatant when you actually get to the plot twists... it just does everything right. The characters are fully fleshed, the plot is engrossing and plausible and the scenes and sets are well placed and described. It's just marvellous. But of course, I’d expect nothing less from Jenna. She’s been a great help with writing for my friends and I. Even her on-the-spot examples from her videos sound wonderful. If you haven't already, READ THIS BOOK!!!!!

2 of 2 people found this review helpful

*clears throat*

AAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH THAT WAS AMAZING HOLY CRAP WHAT THE GORE LEILA TOBIAS THE ENDING THE PLOT TWISTS FLYNN JENNA MORECI I LOVE WHAT

2 of 2 people found this review helpful

The most mesmerize story ever.

I'm amaze at how violent, vile and disturbing it is within the first chapters. The book really shows that corruption can be found a beautiful place, and that danger is everywhere. I love the build up between the two characters.
I never have supported a couple in my life and I never have related to a main character from a fiction story.
It's different with this book.

1 of 1 people found this review helpful

Brilliant!

5* Didn't want it to end, cant wait for the next one in the series.