Moon Wreck

The Slaver Wars, Book 1

By: Raymond L. Weil

Narrated by: Liam Owen

Length: 5 hrs and 11 mins

Publisher's summary

For the first time, all three short stories that introduce The Slaver Wars science fiction series are together. The Slaver Wars has currently sold over 100,000 copies. Listen to how it all began.

Disaster has struck the first Moon landing to be attempted in years. Commander Jason Strong and his fellow lunar explorer Greg Johnson have become stranded with no way home. In desperation, they set off in their lunar rover to check out an anomaly they discovered on their descent. What they find will shake their beliefs and what they know of human history. It is the beginning of an adventure that will take them far out into the Solar System and to a discovery that is beyond belief.

©2014 Raymond L. Weil (P)2014 Raymond L. Weil

not so modern

kinda old school gender roles and seemed to lack technical imagination, not going to follow this series

The worst science fiction book I've ever read

Would you try another book from Raymond L. Weil and/or Liam Owen?

Liam Owen - yes. He's great in the Hard Luck Hal series

Raymond L. Weil - never.

Would you ever listen to anything by Raymond L. Weil again?

Nope

Any additional comments?

The story is pedestrian but in better hands it might have been ok. Science fact was definitely ignored. The characters are cardboard cut outs; compared to Peter F. Hamilton or Robert Heinlein they're vanishingly thin. What really separates this book from others is the awful writing. The dialog is poorly composed -- which is too bad because Liam Owen can do a great job with good dialog -- unbelievably repetitious and downright lame. After wading a few chapters into the book I thought it might be (a) YA -- but you'd have to be really Y; (b) a satire on 50's sci fi -- which it might actually be, intentionally or not; or (c) humorous scifi -- but if so, the punch line went completely over my head. By the end I decided it was (d) lousy. Steer clear.

"Is this safe," says mission commander too often!

I loved the story, but the delivery was far too repetitive. I can't imagine a space commander being so intimidated by the safety concerns. I really hope the next books in the series improve. I don't need a dozen reminders of the events that transpired in the last chapter. I would like it to move along faster and tell me more about the aliens.

A book of cliches

I just got done listing to this book. I will be returning it..
So much more could have been done with the base concept in the book.
I was hopping for something in the Lost Fleet or Kris Longknife type of space adventure.
I was very disappointed. The authors writing style needs lots of work.

Example: At one point everyone on the bridge of a ship or two were introduced along a few "interesting" details about each. Now I am sorry, but most folks will only remember the names of one or two key characters. One should concentrate on developing them. Not giving me useless personal details on folks I may on hear about only one time. It got to the point I just did not care any more.

As one reviewer also pointed out this author has a very limited view of professionalism of woman kind. Example: One of the first things a female computer expert wants to do is give the newly found alien ship the woman's touch. What??? There is more stuff like this...

Novice sci-fi author

A moon landing goes bad after encountering interference that breaks down the lander’s on-board computerized systems. Two astronauts—now being stranded on the Moon—discovers a powerful artificial intelligence and an approaching threat to Earth while investigating the source of the interference.

The story is simple, the plot line is simple, the premise is shallow, and the characters act like robots reading a script of their expected emotional reactions. There is no connection between their emotions and their behavior. Having read more than my fair share of sci-fi books, it is easy to tell that Raymond L. Weil is a novice sci-fi author.

The aliens are, of course, fully fluent in English and no Earth customs surprises them.

Some Dumb Astronauts and Scientists

The female scientist comes to research the alien ship and she can see where the room needs a woman’s touch, rofl. This is the same mindset of the rest of the story. I gave it two hours.

Complete waste of time!

Would you try another book from Raymond L. Weil and/or Liam Owen?

NO! This author must loath the editing process or the "editor" should be shot. There are so many "WTF" and "Are you serious?" moments that the book was complete unenjoyable.

Has Moon Wreck turned you off from other books in this genre?

No. But if this was one of my first ventures into I would be very concerned about wasting more time.

How could the performance have been better?

Give the performer a better script and I am sure he could have been better. Seriously, there was not much to work with here.

If you could play editor, what scene or scenes would you have cut from Moon Wreck?

Well, I would have suggested a few things.

1) The premise is pretty good. Begin there and rethink everything.
2) Rethink the characters and their motivations.
3) Stop endlessly reminding people of concepts and events that just happened. It is unnecessary and annoying. People do not want to be annoyed while reading things. So stop reminding then of those annoying things. Like the times that you restate some event or concept that just happened. Those things can be annoying. ;)
4) Spend TIME explaining things like how everyone speaks english, has similar gestures, similar rank structure. Also, come up with a better reason for the similarities and accentuate the differences. (of course you have to actually have differences to accentuate first). This is supposed to be a race of humans that evolved and lived on multiple worlds independently from earth. You might want to spend some time addressing how the hell that is possible.

That would be session 1 of about 50 meetings. This entire book needed 3 more years of development.

Any additional comments?

I don't think I can express in words how bad this entire thing is. I'm not sure what possessed this author to think this was done enough to produce a book or series out of. It is an ill conceived and ill explained nightmare of ineptness. Horrible, terrible, and easily the shittiest attempt at Science Fiction I have had the unfortunate opportunity to witness in at least 5 years.

This is my narrative. My narrative is from grade 1

Would you try another book from Raymond L. Weil and/or Liam Owen?

No chance of ever trying this author again.

Listening to this book one is constantly reminded of the genre that follows the pattern of: "This is John. John is a boy. John is a happy boy. "I am a happy boy", says John. This is Jane. Jane also thinks John is a happy boy. "John is a happy boy", says Jane". You know: Grade 1 narrative.

The characters are also all bland and boring, and inhumanely too good and caring and sickeningly un-human.

I just couldn't take it anymore.

Has Moon Wreck turned you off from other books in this genre?

No, there are great books in this genre, just not from this author.

What three words best describe Liam Owen’s voice?

Potentially good, but not with this level of book

What character would you cut from Moon Wreck?

The author

moon wreck audable

book is very good but person doing the audible does not follow what is written. very unnerving trying to keep up when wording is changed.