The Civil War has ended. Jim and Noble are two rebels who set out from San Francisco searching for gold. While helping a prospector recover his claim, they encounter love, guilt, danger, and violence. They come up against a dying assassin who wants to go out in a blaze of glory and a psychotic mayor with a terrible secret. They help a young farmer whose abusive father becomes set on killing Jim. The Gunman is a story of friendship which illustrates how sacrifice, courage, and love can ultimately triumph over evil. It will make you laugh, move you to tears, and leave you with hope.
©2004 Kerbit Little (P)2016 Kerbit Little
The audio sample -- not to mention the title -- gave the impression that this would be an action-packed story about a gunfighter. I'm almost two hours in and so far it's about a greedy Mormon father who mistreats and whips his sons and even strangers for pretty much no reason and rapes women, whether they belong to his "family" or not.
I assume this is backstory and the eldest son will predictably stand up against his father and become the title character. The author's path to that point is, as I said, cliche and predictable and all the whipping and rape has left a bad taste in my mouth anyway.
If you haven't hooked me and given me somebody to care about for reasons other than they're being treated poorly by 1:48:45, you're wasting my time. In a screenplay, a page is equal to one minute of screen time. I don't know what that translates to in manuscript pages, but I've heard other authors tell entire stories by the time this guy has gotten his oars in the water.
He sounds like he took a valium before he started reading.
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