FANFIC PROLOUGE

Lilystorm awoke to yowling, not that it surprised her or anything, her part of Waterclan was the noisiest of all. This yowling, however, was a cry of panic, her clan mates were yelling, “EVERYONE WAKE UP! WE ARE UNDER ATTACK!” Not the most comforting thing to hear. Lilystorm stumbled out of the warrior's den and out into the center of camp. She watched as many other warriors came out, mouths gaping at the enemy. It was a group of rouges, except there were so many it was hard to see which one was which. Lilystorm watched in shock as even more rogues came into camp. Lilystorm knew she was going to die, all the warriors knew they were going to die, but somehow the thought didn’t scare her, dying a warrior’s death was what she had wanted, she knew she would go to Starclan and she accepted it. Instead, she feared for the cats on patrol, she hoped they would escape and find the other parts of Waterclan. Lilystorm saw Waterclan’s leader, and also Lilystorm’s father, Rockstar come out of his den, his eyes went wide, but he signaled to attack. She flung herself into battle and immediately the rogues started to fight her. Lilystorm fought off the first one easily, but more took his place. A tabby rogue bit her leg, causing her to shriek in pain, she slashed at the rogue and he fell. Just as she defeated the second cat another one started to claw at her, more and more rogues came until she was overwhelmed. Sparks of pain exploded everywhere, but she continued fighting. The rogues were not skilled at fighting, but there were so many of them that it was impossible to fight them off. Before she died, she sent one last prayer to Starclan. Please Starclan, don’t let this evil triumph Waterclan, don’t let them crush us, save the survivors, please. And with that last prayer, Lilystorm sank into darkness, into the fields of Starclan.

Tips and advice ✨

The story is really good, but here are some tips for making fanfics : Always include all thoughts, emotions, and senses, like tell the audience of the stench of the foul rogues. Also remember to not over use words like rogue, it will get annoying. Try using cat, feline, menace, flea-bidden cat, etc! Be creative. Also here is a example of what you could have wrote : “Lilystorm couldn’t fight all of the crow food smelling cats all at once, they may not be good fighters but the numbers were what mattered.” (Try to be creative with the name, make it contribute to the story)