I really like the books and the characters, but I wish the author would make the fights a little less chaotic, granted that space battles are chaotic but when I read the story I loose the image in my head of what is happening. It is just a jumbled mess till you come out the other side. I would recommend that the author look at other space battles stories to see how to incorporate ways to show dimension. The only other thing is that I did get a sense of scale in the first book but in this one it felt stilted. I again did not have an image in my head of where everyone was compared to other locations.
Last item was the added observer, if he is going to be on the bridge following the main character and be that annoying then he really needs to be there and be annoying. He was annoying for like a couple of pages in the book and then not mentioned again. If he was muzzled again it was not mentioned. Even with these items I still enjoyed the book and will continue to read it.