This story was highly relatable. I have nothing in common with either of the characters in it, but the situation was so, so familiar: sitting in a public place discussing the high drama of life with someone you aready have a complex relationship with. It was light and voyeuristic, an enjoyable few minutes reveling in somebody else’s semi-monumental angst. The writing is spot on and the readers did a wonderful job.
The dialogue in this short story was really sharp and snappy and at times funny. But also a little sad. It kind of reminded me of Ernest Hemingway's "Hills Like White Elephants" except it's a brother and sister, not a couple. I had a clear picture of the uptight brother and the funny sister.
The dialog is well structured and has good flow. The personalities of the chatacters are well-defined. The chatacters sometimes fall back on racist stereotypes, and this could be off-putting to some readers.