I like the whole idea of a story, but sooo much is lacking. Lawrence and Alonzo are hard to keep separate as the names are too similar. Not enough cha..Show More »racter development is done. The narrator, who is pleasant to listen to, doesn't have breaks In Between the chapters or scenes. . I finally quit listening to this choppy story when I could not visualize it anymore. I hope that the author would revisit this story with some depth and a good writing teacher. This story was like one long run-on sentence.