Viking Vampires Voyage: "The snow this winter is so deep that humans are not traveling as usual with their dog sleds. I have not had blood in a few days and I am feeling weak. Suddenly I smelled human blood. I spotted two humans from a distance. Fresh blood was slowly dripping on the white snow. They probably had an accident and were lost. My immortal life gets complicated when a handsome 19-year-old Viking Vampire named Mikael asked for my help. During our sea voyage to free Norway, I started having feelings towards Mikael's 18-year-old brother named Noak. My name is Klara and I am also a Viking Vampire."
Vampire of the Sea: The English Captain of the Medusa's Lair pirate ship gets killed in battle leaving his only daughter Mar with the dilemma of taking the Captain title. The crew does not seem to accept her as a Captain because she is a young female. What the crew does not know is that she was attacked by a vampire on the night of her 22nd birthday and she is now a pirate vampire. After a demonstration of vampire power the crew does not dare to question her abilities and start calling her Captain right away.
©2012 Vianka Van Bokkem (P)2013 Vianka Van Bokkem
No! This has to be a beginning writer. She has a great imagination but she lacks in other areas.
I loved the idea of vampire Vikings.! The story had all the aspects needed to fly, but unfortunately it only puttered on the runway.
What? Who is Ginny You! LOL
Perhaps. In its current form it is admittably hard to read.
A few things I would like to say about this book. First please stop using I so much there were so many times the author just chickened out and used I instead of taking the time to flesh out the story and tell us why I. Also stop using just one or two words to describe something. For instance tell us why you so desperately needed blood. We know its been a while since you've fed, but what has that done to you? Is your skin shriveled? Looking like old parchment paper, browned and so thin it might rip at the slightest touch. Instead of the hard as steel, polished marble appearance it has when you are sated with blood
Or instead of describing a love interest as simply beautiful, tell us why you find him so. This would add so much to this story. I would be very interested to reread this if it is ever reworked.
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