Stepbrother Secret

By: Madelin Brook

Narrated by: Cheyanne Humble

Length: 52 mins

Publisher's summary

Despite having a promiscuous past, Luke has an amazing, affectionate, overall wonderful girlfriend named Laura, who loves to cook and bake for him. But, he is also dangerously close to his socially awkward stepbrother Eric. He enjoys playing video games and spending time with Eric, but also loves Laura dearly and doesn't want to ever lose her.

Luke hangs out with Eric often to prevent Eric from slipping into a deep unhealthy avoidance of people. When they are behind closed doors, they get intimately close. He ends his days though cuddling with Laura and having a healthy relationship with her to balance the unhealthy relationship with Eric.

He knows what he has with Eric is wrong, but he also doesn't want it to end. Despite what he refused to do, he feels some guilt about his relationship with Eric. Will Laura ever find out about this secret relationship that has been going on for years? Or will Eric ever finally end his relationship with Luke to focus on the woman of his dreams?

©2015 Active Passion Publications (P)2016 Active Passion Publications

Laughable bottom-rung juvenile semi-erotica

This story is the best indication that anyone, and I do mean ANYONE, can get a book published (including through self-publishing) and in audiobook form too. This book is so bad it seems to be a joke. A small example of some of the ineptness within include these statements:

"I can kiss good when I feel like it."
"No I think it will be I who wins this time."
"Took Lucas' penis by the mouth."
"It reached all to the back of the throat."
"After he was done sucking her chest."

And the author actually refers to vagina as "snatch." Does any ADULT still use that term except in jest?

So the story is about college-age characters Eric (gay; serious social anxiety), Luke, & Laura (both age 20). Eric and Luke are step siblings. Laura is Luke's girlfriend. Both Luke and Laura attend college. Eric still lives at home and pays rent to their parents. There is 1 sex scene between Luke & Eric and 1 between Luke & Laura.

The story included daily minutiae like what Laura had to buy for her sorority sisters, though it added absolutely nothing to the story. And there were several other parts like that, especially some of the conversations between Luke and Laura including her talking about how he should eat better and visit his mom more. And those moments were more than just a 1 sentence note.

The narrator's voice for the female characters is whiny and nasally and vastly, unbelievably irritating. She sounds like she's trying to act instead of being the characters. There's an air of unnecessary and unappealing exaggeration in her portrayals. Add that to the severely juvenile writing, and you have the mess that is this "story."

And the little supposed twist in the story couldn't have been more obvious. It along with the ending, which the twist help manufacture helped support my belief that this author is no older than 17 and not an A English student either. Maybe a C.