No. The characters are flat. They go into a list of things that could potentially affect their current lives but nothing ever does. Their biggest issues are the logistics of being together, where to live, how the money is delegated, what days are applicable for sex.
Aaron is so utterly one dimensional. He lives and exists for Zach. I cannot even fathom who Aaron is as a person without attributing some aspect of it to his lust for Zach.
I didn't expect this to be exactly meaningful or emotionally compelling, but the conflict was so minimal that nothing seemed important. Aaron's super human ability to love Zach and only Zach never becomes an issue which i imagine would for someone who has enjoyed a lifetime of uninhibited sex. Even Brian on Queer as Folk had to go through cancer in order to reach a heteronormative lifestyle with Justin. All Aaron had to do with sleep with Zach.
One of the biggest issues I have with this is the little acknowledgements to the audience Zach makes. Leave that to Zach Morris from Saved by the Bell. I would care more about your story if you didn't assume to know what I was thinking and respond in such a catty-pre-adolescent-oh-I'm-such-an-edgy-gay tone.
Something with substance.
Awkward during sex
Absolutely not. Unless they break up and Aaron learns to not live completely for one person and Zach mellows out with his rebellious I'm here/queer get used to it attitude.
I've read fan fiction better than this.
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