USA | Member Since 2012
The theme was both disorganized and too narrowly focused on financial traders? It lacked specific real world cases and examples.
Focus more on the human interactions, motivations and emotions and far less on the machinery that surrounds them.
Probably not unless he makes the move to building characters involved in challenging situations. A walking tour of the technology and layout of the equipment in play is just not as interesting as how humans grapple with the problems at hand.
Yes, the story was the problem not the voice.
Teenage boys who think and converse at the level of a lunch room table.
This genre can be done well. Old Man's War is a good example of scifi action with intelligent characters who have moved beyond the limitations and experience of the teenage mind.
Do not scream. Even when the character is yelling do not scream the words into my ear.
Disappointment, waste of time, frustration that the writing could not move beyond a few stereotypical characters.
The characters are shallow. The author seems to almost use the text from previous sections to describe the current scene. The sentence structure rarely exceeds six words. The story was filled with cultural anachronisms that could never fit with an alien race.
The story served its purpose. It moved along enjoy to allow me to mindless follow along on my commute to work. The author in the first few chapters switches back and forth between two set of characters on different worlds. He then spends nearly 20 chapters on one set and we are left wondering what happened to the others. He should have switched back occasionally to keep the other characters as part of the story telling.
Yes, I am going to read the next book in the series. A mindless book filled with ridiculous inconsistencies is ok occasionally.
The author writes well. The writing is descriptive and enjoyable. My issue was that I could not determine where the story was taking me.
No, it is a well written book but not a story I could appreciate.
I would keep nearly all the characters. The author uses each new character encountered to tell us about the people and culture that character represents. I would just prefer if the author gave us a better sense of why we were wondering the Metro system.
No, the beginning third of the book was a maze of unrelated characters and time periods. I gave up after the first five chapters. Not sure why the author would think we would be interested in characters who we could not place within context of some story line.
No, it was not the writing style. It was the lack of characters acting in a way consistent with the situations they are in.
No, the end of the world can be interesting but spending it with really dumb survivors is even worst than the end of the world.
If your aim is to be a Rainmaker you probably know a little more than the verge sales person. So skip all of the basics that come in Sales 101. We already know that spilling coffe on the customer's desk is a no no.
Far too simplistic. Give me five key things a rainmaker does that others do not. Forget telling me all the basic that any competent sales person has before they apply for a job.
For the author to have done some long distance backpacking. For a 200 mile trek this guy was carrying everything but the kitchen sink. WhenUFOu are travelling long distance you drop ounces to save weigh in your pack.
The genre is good but this author seemed more interested in telling us what the next thing in this guy's pack was. If I am fighting my way back to my family with little kids in the middle of the end of the world as we know it, I am sure that I am doing a lot more miles than this guy each day. He stops more often for days at a time then could every be justified if his passion was his family.
The author wants to tell the tale of how a survialist could pull different gadgets from his pack not how a father pushed the limits of his endurance to reach his little ones.The storied turned me off to this series for sure.
Not unless I could return it if this is indicative of his story lines.
This is a zombie story. Yet it spends most of the story on the unrelated, juvenile sex activities of the main characters. It jumps around to bring in characters for a chapter just to kill them. We do not need to spend a chapter learning the why and how the members of a soon to be dead rock band obtained theIr stage names. It read more like "fill up the space" text than a coherent story line.I tried to stay with it but gave up shortly after the halfway mark.
The performance was fine. The problem is all content
It held potential but lack in execution. Keep the character development relative to the overall story. A substantial part of the writting was devoted to juvenile learing and sex acts that did nothing to add to the characters motivation, habits or abilities.
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