I felt there wasn't enough conflict to make the story more interesting. The characters were at odds, yes, with one another occasionally, but not enough to make me worry about them. Not really. Also, the sex was almost 'cut-and-paste' in it's similarity.I also would have kept this as a novella, since that's what it originally was apparently, the story didn't stretch well.
I can honestly say I haven't read anything like it to date.
Definately Sender, most similar to Charles Carr.
Definately more conflict and better sex scenes.
Carr has to be commended for his attempt at a 4 year old girl. It was fairly decent, considering how low his natural reading voice was.
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