Writing characters that are believable. If I was doing magical research and someone hired me because of that, why would I also need a job at finding vampires? If my life was being threatened I would head for a safe house, not run out on a mission to figure out who was using my magical donuts to do evil. If an ex shows up and someone partners me up with them, I am going to need something other then "they are a double agent" to convince me it's ok. If i hate vampires and they slowly drain my life force, I am not going to risk my life just because i am told to without a back story of why I must. If a master vampire calls my body guard son, i think i would figure out thats the guys maker. I think it's also not believable that I would accept a "we will talk about it latter" response and drop it never to be mentioned again untill the great reveal. If someone almost killed my dog I would not instantly forgive them. If someone I did not trust was helping me find info I would ask basic questions like where are we going and why. If someone tries to attack me and starts to reveal some kind of secret but gets cut off for whatever reason, I would notice. The writer forces the story line foward using flawed character logic.
In the first few chapters the narrator was having a hard time transitioning from female character to the monotone used to give information. It's ok now and then but it should never happen in the begining while a listener is getting to know characters. Audio samples tend to come from this part of the book so it's vitally important to get it right.
Characters seem far too willing to accept world changing revelations to the point that i could not get into it. I think there is going to be some girl on girl romance which would be hot except it's far too forced and juvenile. Something is wrong with the writing. Maybe it was cut too much or that the idea balls (southpark look it up) didn't line up right either way the book comes off as superficial and rushed.
I am not a fan of books with so many different points of view. The book also had an outdated feel to it that i can't really explain other then to say it's there.
Book has in addition to the girl a very annoying "boyfriend" that spouts huge amounts of religious nonsense. 42 minutes in I turned it off.
If you do a search for sci-fi and fantasy this novel is listed. The first book is great. It's got magic, self discovery, enemies and their plots to discover. It's everything you expect, at first that is. The further and further you get into the series more it becomes about the latest love interest and gossip. I hate it that it had so much potential. Someone didn't catagorize these books right. These books are the kind where the main character seems to date everyone but seems to always experience the "I can't be with them because __FILL_IN_THE_BLANK__". I made it all the way to the 5th book hoping the romance would go away but it just got worse. I liked the narrators, all 3 of them LOL. The first narrator kept doing this weird sound that was supposed to be a cat talking or something but to me it seemed like the cat was saying "nympho" all the time. Maybe it was on purpose, not sure but it annoyed me. The second narrator made me think someone went from an immature 20 year old to a girl of 15. It was a little jaring.
I loved the unknown, the coldness, the creepyness of the first 3 hours. Out of no where without any build up the romance ensues. It's taking forever to get to through this book. I am a little more then 1/2 way and only like 2 things have happened. It feels drawn out. It's like someone got a 12 hour book and split it. When not scaring you your falling asleep.
I loved the book until about an hour and a half in where guy on guy action exploded onto the scene (laugh). I was getting interested in the story then the fake romance started to appear. I ignored it hoping it was just some character building but I was wrong. The gay scene was very graphic. I went back to the book on audiable trying to figure out what happened and noticed up top it says romance. Son of a... I did a search for scifi, the synopsis has no hint of porn and the cover could be just some alien looking down at a victom. I re-checked the new realease search and of course it does not say it's a romance. You have to click into the details to figure it out. That is not right. I feel like audiable and the publisher are in colusion to trick me into buying romance novels. The book has some kinda of split personality disorder. It starts off as scifi guess the writer is in on it too, then vampire stuff appears and now gay porn. Audiable needs to add in icons indicating romance so people like myself can find aliens and technology rather then boyfriends and flowers.
Nothing really happened. About 40% through the book i fast forwarded to the last 2 chapters to find this explosive heart breaking end several have hinted at, it wasn't. At the time of this review it's rated as a 4 on audiable with the stars as mostly 4.5s and a 4.8 on amazon. I find any 4 or 5 ratings by non teens highly suspect. A slow build up, more like a slow let down.
Wow i really enjoyed this book. When I read the synopsis I got the impression it was going to be one of those D&D books where some modern guy falls though a hole and appears in a world worthy of a 20 sided die. I listened to the audio clip but it had only humans and they were using some old english words here and there. That was confusing. Where were the elfs? The other thing that struck me as different, was that... the writer and publisher are the same. Self published? I wanted something different so I gave it a try. I was blown away. This isn't a D&D book or a medieval setting found via a magic doorway. The title gives you a hint by using the word "portals". It's a parallel worlds book. Not only that but you latter find out that everytime someone steps through one they are changed to fit into that particular reality. This creates a lot of potential for future content being that in one reality you are an engineer in another you are a mage. Besides height and build alterations there can also be changes of species. Where would I put the tail when I sit? That is a question you might ask yourself if you buy the book.
5 hours into the book and not one of the what... like 10 or so characters Carina interacts with will ever explain anything. On top of that, assuming you accept scenes of glances or excuses like "we will talk about it latter" your subjected to the same old "I can't be with him because __FILL_IN_BLANK__". Something is really wrong with the writing.
I tried to give the book a chance for an hour and a half but had to turn it off. The writing seemed unnecessary slow and awkward. What is supposed to be a slow reveal is just filler to increase word count in my opinion. I could not connect with any character due to the writing and it was made worse by a mediocre narrator that could not emphasize character voices. After falling asleep and doing a rewind I figured out that no amount of patience or fast forwarding would fix the problem.
I would not recommend this book. I rated the book as a 1 to reflect my feelings but I have seen worse writing and the narrator has potential so i gave both performance and story a 2. I really don't understand why there are so many high ratings. I think in this case the wisdom of the crowd falls far short of reality.
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