Writing characters that are believable. If I was doing magical research and someone hired me because of that, why would I also need a job at finding vampires? If my life was being threatened I would head for a safe house, not run out on a mission to figure out who was using my magical donuts to do evil. If an ex shows up and someone partners me up with them, I am going to need something other then "they are a double agent" to convince me it's ok. If i hate vampires and they slowly drain my life force, I am not going to risk my life just because i am told to without a back story of why I must. If a master vampire calls my body guard son, i think i would figure out thats the guys maker. I think it's also not believable that I would accept a "we will talk about it latter" response and drop it never to be mentioned again untill the great reveal. If someone almost killed my dog I would not instantly forgive them. If someone I did not trust was helping me find info I would ask basic questions like where are we going and why. If someone tries to attack me and starts to reveal some kind of secret but gets cut off for whatever reason, I would notice. The writer forces the story line foward using flawed character logic.
In the first few chapters the narrator was having a hard time transitioning from female character to the monotone used to give information. It's ok now and then but it should never happen in the begining while a listener is getting to know characters. Audio samples tend to come from this part of the book so it's vitally important to get it right.
I tried to give the book a chance for an hour and a half but had to turn it off. The writing seemed unnecessary slow and awkward. What is supposed to be a slow reveal is just filler to increase word count in my opinion. I could not connect with any character due to the writing and it was made worse by a mediocre narrator that could not emphasize character voices. After falling asleep and doing a rewind I figured out that no amount of patience or fast forwarding would fix the problem.
I would not recommend this book. I rated the book as a 1 to reflect my feelings but I have seen worse writing and the narrator has potential so i gave both performance and story a 2. I really don't understand why there are so many high ratings. I think in this case the wisdom of the crowd falls far short of reality.
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