Make the villans interesting. They are petty and predictable.
Most of the heros are half brain dead.
Too much of the story reflects the dreariness of everyday life. That is exactly what I don't want in a fantasy story.
It's got the sophistication of pink pony story for teenage girls.
Easily it would work well for kids afternoon TV.
So much potential, so much disappointment. I skipped over the court case it was just too annoying to stomach.
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