Author should have taken a writing class
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Anger! Story line could have been more enjoyable if author didn't use the SAME wording over and over and over and over....such as "my inner goddess", "my sub-conscience", "holy shit", "holy crap". Couldn't think of any other words to use? Got VERY OLD, VERY FAST.Also, how many times can the character say "I blush", or "I flush" She is doing the most intimate things with this man, yet every time he speaks to her, she "flushes" or "blushes".Really?The other overused dialog is "I gaze at him", "he gazes at me", "I gaze up at him", "he gazes down at me", .....can't they simply just "look" at each other?Lastly, the e-mail interchanges could have been entertaining, but repeating the e-mail date/time/closing/name/title/company, etc. every time quickly became boring. Did the author think the readers are so stupid that we couldn't figure out who was writing the e-mails? Or was she using all of this extreanous information as a time/space filler?
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