"Sing Song cadence of the narrator really grates"
I would recommend the story, but i am having trouble finishing it because of the cadence of the narrator.. it's level level up level level up is very annoying to me, but perhaps someone else wouldn't be bothered by it.
less artifice and more natural speaking. When she did characters, they were ok, but the general 3rd person narration was so repetative and sing-song, it just made me forget what she was saying.