Perhaps a woman with a strong voice and an ability to portray conversations in a more life-like manor.
I only listened to the first 17 chapters and frankly found all of the characters boring due to the superficial dialogue. I wouldn't know who to suggest for deletion.
I doubt I could write much better fiction, but then again, I'm not a novelist. My love of authors such as Dean Koontz, who can paint pictures with words, tends to spoil me for such trite prose. I worked for 25+ years in government, dealing with politics at local, state, and federal levels, and I do not believe the people talked like those protrayed herein. It's very difficult to get interested in the plot when you trivialize the issues with two people "throbbing" for each other. Please!!!!!
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