"Need reader improvement"
No
Rescue of Will and Horace from the bullies
There isn't enough voice variation. It takes on a one note quality.
"Endless tale of Abuse"
We want to learn about history but what does this story have to offer? The conundrum here is artful writing about an entire cast of ill-fated characters. A grimm repetitive account of people who never win. They are only overcome by their environment. Is this your only experience with life? When we lose out on the one hand are there not compensations on the other? When they took care of the evil school master, for example. There was no triumph. No one could every get a morsel of truth to the right person. Are people so truly handicapped? Give us some hope as well. How can any of us carry on in life if the measure of hope is so meagre.