"How can a girl with that mch moxie be so whiny"
Most likely the narrator. Give the girl the strength she deserves. I got the feeling if I read the book I might enjoy it. This is because unlike the narrator who makes Catnice sound weak I picture a strong and self confident person, one with normal fears but strong enough to always survive.
Great story line. Give the characters more strength. Get rid of so much of the mellow drama.
Here is a girl, our heroin, who takes on the establishment yet the narrator makes her sound like a weak, ultra-over-dramatic looser. She takes the mellow drama to new levels. In fact, after 5 minutes I couldn't take it any more, I was litterally ready to stab myself in the ear with an ice pick! (how's that for over dramatic!) I'll have to read the book if I want to know what happens.