"Story's good, don't like the narrator."
I think the narrator has let this story down, and I'd love to hear it read by somebody else. He mispronounces many words, and can't seem to settle on the pronunciation of a few others, changing from one sentence to the next. I didn't like the inflection he used in a lot of the dialogue, either; kinda made some of the characters sound like idiots, and stereotyped.
As a horror story it does quite well, and I'm sure it'd be great with a different person reading it.